Yup, it is *almost* finnished. Half of it done, but I want some responce before continuing.

CLICKY!

It uses the duel idea I mentioned in the "The Beast" progress thread, aye. With the addition of small narrations after each death.


*Spoiler*
Yes, it was made as a responce to 300, since I am getting sick of all these disturbingly wrong portrayals of ancient persia, and sparta.
Media people: You got it all wrong in the first place. Suck it down.

The "breathing scene" will be not be as cool as I had in mind, due to limitations with my camera, but I will do my best.

*End of spoiler*

The main character in this story might appear in TSR2.

Sweetness!

I love the duel technique. Using black&white pics really helps it getting more serious (that's why I almost exclusively used black, grey and white for my vampire vigs). And I really like how you portrayed the Spartan, and the Persians thoughts about him. The narrative felt a bit, don't know what to call it, "dry" perhaps in places but the sweet action pics makes up for it!

And about the word dêv, what is you source behind that? I'm almost entirely sure the proper Ancient Persian would be Daiva/Daeva (pronounced the same). Dêv looks a lot more like Sanskrit Deva (the same word as Latin Deus btw... for the Linguist nerds :P). Or is it Avestan perchance?

I dunno were I found it, but there was a list on different spellings/pronounciations for different times, and I found this one to be the one for this certain epoch, according to the source. It might be incorrect, but I did use sources for it.
I might change it when I find myself doing the rest of the story, and when I got evidence for my error.

As for the dryness of the dialogue, aye, I am used to write for characters that are not as "heavy" as this main character, who is very serious and somewhat melancholic.

OK, be warned everybody. This is beyond regular geekiness. I won't force anyone to read it :P

I don't know if you've heard of a brilliant Swedish book called "I döda språks sällskap" but in that book there is a whole chapter on Ancient Persian and there the author spells it "Daiva" and "Nationalencyklopedin" uses the spelling "Daeva" (and as I noted before they are pronounced the same so it doesn't matter, they are just different translitterations).

To me dêv sounds more like Middle Persian (era of the Sassanid Empire) since they got rid of a lot of lots diphtongs then, for example Ahura Mazda ---> Ohrmuzd and Angra Mainyu ---> Ahriman.

And if we should turn to the ultimately unreliable source we can take Wikipedia. There they label the spelling "Dēv" (which would essentially be the same as "Dêv") as "Earlier Persian" which would mean early Islamic era, derived from Middle Persian "Dēw", and in turn Avestan "Daēva".

Aye, maybe I should change it in the next release. ;)

I hope I didn't sound too much like a know-it-all... it's just that I'm so fascinated by these things :D

Now, back to the story; I forgot to mention before that I really like the use of those wall-paintings or whatever it is depicting the athanatoi. Really sets the mood.

Also the snow looks really good on this page. Photoshop Cloud effect?

I used a the spraycan, actually. Used different sizes and settings for the falling snow, "windy" snow and some snow to cover up the gaps inbetween the plates.

Oh... cool.... doesn't need to be more complicated than that...

Cool! The graphic effects and the dialog all came together really well here and made for a cool comic. I've never seen this kind of comic in LEGO, and I like how very little is actually said from the figs. The "300" style narration is really neat... I think it translated really well into LEGO.

I have to confess I didn't see too much similar with the 300 movie and your cool comic in terms of the characters and story, but maybe that's because it's too early in the story. (Plus the fact that I liked 300 a lot... sorry! :ph43r: )

Still, all of that aside, I really like what you are doing here - it's like a whole new subcategory of LEGO comic.

EDIT>> The gold spears and custom shields are perfect for this story... they really help to put the reader there.

Good jon Hordesman!


I like the snow affect. :D

Hey Hey Hey!

Look's like Hordesman is getting really good with his photoshop skills, awesome effects! The black and white scenes are really powerful and impactful in my opinion -I really like them!

I rarely reply on an author's writing because I'm not a very good writer so I shouldn't really comment on another's writing. But like Maedhros, your fluentness in English is unbelievable -well done!

Keep up the good work!

I know this is quite late, but I'd just like to say that was a very good story. Your imagery of the snowy mountain and the storm is excellent, the figs look good and the message of the story was quite powerful...I was also a bit disgusted with 300's inaccurate and racist portrayal of the Persians as monsters existing only to be killed. Good work.