Anyone got any input on this objective statement for a resume?

sounds like a lot of hogwash.

It is. Duh :flight:

If we were playing buzz word bingo, everybody would have won on that sentence.

seriously I think so to, that's why I'm questioning it.

What's buzzword bingo?

If you'd have spent any time in corporate America, you'd get it. CEOs and other big wigs at corporations tend to spew big words that don't really say shit, just to sound like they know WTF they're talking about.

There was a commercial on a while ago that made fun of those meetings where everyone got a card with a bunch of corporate buzz words on them. You played the game just like bing.

I'm the last person to ask about sentence structure or whatever, but I would remove the last part of that sentence, sounds like you're laying it on thick.

The objective statment, as I understand it, is like a thesis statement. Basically out of context it reads like that but I have items in the resume that back all the shit up. Talking with me, interviewers will know I'm not an idiot.

I exactly agree.

any thoughts on revision?

Try this:

I present my qualifications, my achievements, and my experience in an effort to secure a position where my skills can be applied to help meet the objectives of the company.

To secure a position where I can apply my creativity and problem-solving skills in order to effectively accomplish my responsibilities.

Bingo

Just so you all kno I am using your input.

How about this?

"I present my skills, achievements, and experience in pursuit of a position where I can apply my creativity and problem-solving skills to reach company objectives."


I'm trying to cut down on weighty word. I think "secure is on" "creativity and problemsolving" is important. I would like to include work ethic somewhere but I don't know how I'm going to do it. I got rid of the "my"s because it seemed redundant and look as if I put too much emphasis on me.

:lol:

I get the gist of it.

I'd find some other word for the first "skills". I don't think it looks right to use the same word to describe something twice in the same sentence.

I thought that too. Yeah, I'll replace one of the "skills"

AEN, A synonym for skill is moxie. Tell your wife

To obtain a position in a career that will allow me to utilize my current skills, as well as, acquire new ones, all while furthering both mine and the company’s primary objectives.

:)

I would change this "problem-solving skills"

to this

"problem-solving abilities"

lol

Does this mean your usual thread beyhg456y

I present my skills, achievements, and experience in pursuing a position where I can apply my creativity and problem-solving ability to reach personal and company goals.

BTW. This is for a career expo. it's a generic resume. Researching, I'd only consider 2 of the companies. I already have a job. This is just testing the market.

Good Luck to you at the expo... :)

Yeasty...I'm not sure that "lol" will work in a resume...but then again, in today's job market, anything is possible... :huh:

Minor constructive criticism:

Instead of saying "I present......in pursuing," change it to active voice -- "I present.....to pursue...."

I'm not a HUGE active voice over passive voice grammar Nazi, but I do think for this purpose the active voice sounds better and makes you appear more serious about the job. FWIW.

I'm going to do that fgtb76

I know this thread is a day old, but I don't like the present word.
How about I bring forth ablities that will better the company. I would leave out anything that had my personal agenda in it.

Why have an objective statement at all? The only thing that could come from it is that they think you are full of BS by using a bunch of buzzwords. You should try a Professional Experience statement like this :

Over 13 years of experience in installing, maintaining, and troubleshooting widgets. Certified as both Widget programmer and installer. Have excellent managerial, communication, and problem-solving skills and work best in a team-oriented environment. My focus is to secure a position in a fast-growing organization, with potential for upward career progression.



By the way, for a small monetary gift, I could write you a resume that would make you walk on water. Everyone I have written one for has gotten an interview within a week and, believe me, most of those people needed my help. Email me at afcgd@yahoo.com if you want my help.

So...what the hell is a widget? :huh: :unsure:


:P

And BTW, welcome aboard... :D

Thanks for the welcome....